Thanks, after reading your comment, my brain is now stuck with that scene.DVS BSTrD said:Dammit Kathleen! You couldn't have done something with a wig? Now my brain is stuck that scene from "There's something about Mary"
Thanks, Clankenbeard. If there was something I would change about the script, it would definitely be the final punchline. I struggled with the script a lot to find a good ending, and eventually settled on what you saw, which was less of a punchline and more of a Charlie Brown-style neurotic moment. I think it fits the tone of the video, but I agree that a bit more punchiness might've been nice.Clankenbeard said:I was humored. Humor was here. Something was indeed different about this one and I waited for the credits to see what was up. Written by Tim? Cool. I am glad to see this lanorious writing chore being spread around a bit.
Tim, I liked it. But you need a closer. Dialogue was good, but there was no punch for me at the end. To me, it just sort of ended with no discernable logical termination or hillarious twist. Now go again! Bring additional funny to the table. Possibly use a Rubik's Cube, Pig Latin and a narcoleptic badger for maximum impact.