I can't *quite* synch your voice and the tone of the chorus with the Western atmosphere of Bastion. It's almost there, but I can't quite make it work in my head. I'm not sure what it is about the song that does this, since it's a great song overall and I really do like listening to it. I think it might just be a fundamental trait of your voice/accent here, which you can't change, so there's not much to be done about that part. Maybe I'd actually make it a little twangier, emphasize the Western elements even more to cover the fact that your voice just isn't going to be Rucks'. The disparity shows more in the chorus, where your voice rises up out of the guttural low sound, than the verses, where it's more like speaking than pure singing.
I think if the rest of the song were in the same kind of voice as happens in the second "Backtrack
Building the road back
Stone cracks
Hammers on the attack
We ride
Over the divide
I guide
Keep you on the right side"
then that would be kind of what I'm thinking of. The really gritty, grindy kind of voice. Not sure if the chorus could be sung in that or what, but.
I really like the lyrics, not to mention this is a song from a game I've actually played, so I'm thrilled to bits to see this.
Bastion is pretty amazing, and it's definitely worth one of your songs.