I have a small background in improv and acting, and I see two things that killed me the whole time.
1) Nearly everyone makes the "here comes the funny part" face as they are telling an obvious joke or making a reference. It makes the audience groan instead of laugh. So if that is the goal of the series, keep it up. I don't think I saw one real "ah ha" moment where anyone changed or discovered something new, made any non-one dimensional observations or anything. Personally, I love character development. If you put a puzzler and an FPS person in a room, funny things will naturally happen, but they don't have to be forced. Think Seinfeld, George and Krammer are fundamentally different characters with different motivations and those differences naturally created hilarious and sticky situations.
2)You guys look like friends. You look comfortable around each other. Somebody needs to be a dick and just cut stuff that A)isn't funny and B)slows the pacing of the story. Sometimes great ideas aren't great for a particular situation. However, if you guys are only together because of this project and you don't care about each others feelings then I am even more confused. Why did everything make it in and 5-7 minutes of relevant and funny things were -squeezed- into 14+ minutes?
And now I feel like a dick. Let me close by saying that I have hope and see serious potential. Furthermore, I am a lazy ass who sits in front of the computer talking smack and you guys are actually creating something. THAT is awesome.
PS please have everyone read "The Truth in Comedy: the manual of improvisation" by by C Halpern, D Close, K H Johnson. I am only referencing this because I was just stating less eloquently everything these guys do a great job communicating. Seriously, your show as a "Harold" would be mind bendingly amazing.
1) Nearly everyone makes the "here comes the funny part" face as they are telling an obvious joke or making a reference. It makes the audience groan instead of laugh. So if that is the goal of the series, keep it up. I don't think I saw one real "ah ha" moment where anyone changed or discovered something new, made any non-one dimensional observations or anything. Personally, I love character development. If you put a puzzler and an FPS person in a room, funny things will naturally happen, but they don't have to be forced. Think Seinfeld, George and Krammer are fundamentally different characters with different motivations and those differences naturally created hilarious and sticky situations.
2)You guys look like friends. You look comfortable around each other. Somebody needs to be a dick and just cut stuff that A)isn't funny and B)slows the pacing of the story. Sometimes great ideas aren't great for a particular situation. However, if you guys are only together because of this project and you don't care about each others feelings then I am even more confused. Why did everything make it in and 5-7 minutes of relevant and funny things were -squeezed- into 14+ minutes?
And now I feel like a dick. Let me close by saying that I have hope and see serious potential. Furthermore, I am a lazy ass who sits in front of the computer talking smack and you guys are actually creating something. THAT is awesome.
PS please have everyone read "The Truth in Comedy: the manual of improvisation" by by C Halpern, D Close, K H Johnson. I am only referencing this because I was just stating less eloquently everything these guys do a great job communicating. Seriously, your show as a "Harold" would be mind bendingly amazing.
Also I like Racing's pickup lines they're completely lame but funny