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Sorry this caused such uproar. I was mearly looking to discuss a poem and try to improve it.
I had no idea i would piss everyone ever off. Forgive me
I had no idea i would piss everyone ever off. Forgive me
You don't have to stay if you don't want too, so don't complain.SnucklesMan said:
People hate bad grammar here.
Stop double posting, once wouldn't be bad, but you've done it several times now. Just edit your last post or wait for
You should probably keep poems for your blog.
Welcome to the escapist. Ignore the moaning under the stairs.
I don't waant to start a flame war. Can we all just be friends? Love is so much better than war. Smile! And I have noticed. Do all the grammar police leave the other forums and congregate here? I'm a little frightened... Groups of people that don't like something I do scare me.
Thanks for the feedback. I'll try to shorten it and take out some excess info. I re-read it and it was pretty wordy. And i honestly never thought to edit my old posts
Eh, it's ok. You might want to try putting some of your one word lines into just one sentence.
Such as instead of having:
"attempting to
calm
my
mind"
Just put it as "Attempting to calm my mind".
Having one big wall of text can make it seem like more of a daunting read than it really is.
Oh, and welcome to the Escapist. I hope you enjoy your time here.
Such as instead of having:
"attempting to
calm
my
mind"
Just put it as "Attempting to calm my mind".
Having one big wall of text can make it seem like more of a daunting read than it really is.
Oh, and welcome to the Escapist. I hope you enjoy your time here.
Thanks for the input. I would post a revised but i think I will make more people mad. Oh, and all the welcomes are not necessary. This is another account since my other got permabanned thanks to ym friend who thinks it's funny to troll. He posted "did he die?" as many times as humanly possible... But thanks for the welcomes anyways... I think
lol. Sorry for the depressing environment. I'm not actually emo. I just find that emo poetry is better recieved because it offers a more dark portal to a more unknown world than poetry about nature and stuff.
I thought it was preety good, i have a friend this reminds me off, and no offence to you, the guy is kinda a whiney dick.
I don't act how I write. I write like an emo prick but I'm not. Like i said, it's just more well recieved.
One thing I have always done is repetition but maybe I got too carried away. And thanks.Quoth said: