Well you should focus more on your writing sytle of your review and not the product you are reviewing. Remember the user reviews allows us here to provide our own views on a product and improve our presentation skills in order to improve ourselves.
If anything since you made this thread you should ask for people to judge your review and writing style and NOT the product in question.
The reason this does seem like an advertisement is that you typed this
samsprinkle said:
Ok...I'll post a link to the review...http://www.escapistmagazine.com/forums/read/326.85758
The review also does not go into great detail. Do not worry about posting a link to your review here because people that will want to comment on it will comment on it and those are the people you should be asking questions like:
1. What did you like about the review?
2. What did you not like about the review?
3. How could I improve next time?