Help with my video series

[Jmumbler]

So I tend to be very, aggressive on some of my opinions about games, and decided to do a video series.
http://www.youtube.com/user/TheJmumbler

I am looking for suggestions on what I could to make it better. Does it need better audio, is my point clear enough, etc...

Plenty of my friends and family like it but there in lies the kicker, there friends and family. Love them to death but I feel like there using the kiddy gloves with me when I ask what they think. I need a harsh, but fair critique.

 

[Batou667]

Hey there, I watched both your videos and I liked them. Not sure if I'd sub to you but with a bit of work on presentation you'd have some good stuff there.

OK, the crits:

- Some of your speech is a bit tricky to follow. I'm not sure if it'd the speed of delivery or whether you mumble a few of your words, or even the rambling kind of structure your discussions/rants take (and don't get me wrong, rambling can be good when done well). Perhaps invest in a better mic, or just slow down your speech a little (or include transcribed subtitles).

- I mostly like the way you keep it low-key and not too flashy and just talk over unedited gameplay videos but sometimes this can be distracting. A couple of times I was watching the action or reading the game subtitles and realised I hadn't actually listened to anything you said for the last 10 seconds or so. Perhaps give your key points some space, like by using onscreen text or switching to blank or static screens more often.

- I also like the way you used images to counterpoint or reinforce what you were saying but in your first vid especially these came about a couple of seconds too late - you made the point, then the image came up but you had already moved on to something else.

- Oh yeah, in the first vid you cut off really abruptly. Try to wrap up your main points at the end!

Anyway, really good start, it looks really promising so far.