Lyric block!

[Captain Pancake]

I've been writing a song these past few days, and it's almost finished now. I was going to use some of my friend's lyrics, but I felt sort of uncomfortable with it, like I was losing my identity with the song, so I've decided to write my own instead. Unfortunately, I just don't know what to write about! Any suggestions, tips, or anything? Once I get the song all done I'll post it on here or in a new thread and see if you guys like it.

 

[Antitonic]

In all seriousness, why not write a song about being unable to write a song?

 

[SonicWaffle]

In all seriousness, why not write a song about being unable to write a song?

But what if he can't think of anything to write? it'll all get a bit circular...

OT: Why not write a song about a surfboarding dog called Chuckles? I bet nobody will have beaten you to it...

 

[Antitonic]

But what if he can't think of anything to write? it'll all get a bit circular...

Take a cue from the '80s. Fill the gaps with la-las, hey-heys and na-nas.

"I can't write a song.
La la la la la.
Can't think of the words.
Do do do do do.
Thinking hurts my brain.
Hey hey na na na."

NOTE: Hypothetical lyrics meant as a comic remark, not an offensive one.

 

[Captain Pancake]

Well if you're almost done, you mind showing us what you already have?

My friend has the recording software and I don't have a video camera handy But I promise as soon as I have it recorded you guys will be the first I show it to.

 

[Captain Pancake]

The problem with your post is that i can't see what kind of song you are looking for. You don't really show us a style. What kind of style you want your lyrics.

Post what you already have and tell us what you are missing. That would help a lot.

Oh yeah um, the song has heavy acoustic undercurrents (the intro is entirely on my acoustic), and it's in a minor key. I was thinking something along the lines of loss or sorrow over something, but the words just won't come out (he's choking, how, everybody's choking now snap back to reality-)

*ahem* it's quite a sombre song, but I'm quite proud of it. I hope this helps because I don't have any way of showing you guys what it sounds like

 

[TeeBs]

Bitches, and Hoes.

 

[koschei8]

How about an instrumental?

 

[Captain Pancake]

How about an instrumental?

I played around with this idea, but the verse part I've written is intentionally basic so I can fit in a few words.

 

[k-ossuburb]

If in doubt just go for a cliché like love, break-ups, waiting by the phone for some reason, going to a club and getting drunk, being a capitalist douchebag with the intent of flashing their genitals at the camera and fellating their own egos over how awesome they are when ironically they're a laughing stock with the brain of a five year old obsessed with material goods and never actually hinting at any messages with weight or meaning and being content with shoveling the same old drivel down the airwaves devoid of any sense of poetry or understanding that anyone besides themselves can relate to and why the hell can't they have some kind of imagination that enables them to write something decent for a change? RAWR!

Sorry, got a little carried away there.

Write about puppies.

 

[Outright Villainy]

Write about the loss of health meters in games.
Sombre topic indeed.

 

[Captain Pancake]

okay, I've got the first verse now, let's have at thee!

Trying to save you, seek the truth too,
Mistakes you just repeat
All I wanted, you move on it,
The love you still mistreat
Take a step back, confide in the facts
Can?t you feel the heat?
It?s all in your head, makes you feel dead,
You?ll never share her sheets

 

[2xDouble]

I'm gonna give you the same advice I give everyone asking for writing advice: Use a Thesaurus.

Think about what you want to convey, perhaps a particular feeling or image. If you're unsure of what to use, think about how you're feeling right now, or go with whatever pops into your mind first. Type a word, any word related to what you're doing, into Word (or whatever) and use the Thesaurus option on it. It'll come back with all kinds of similar words that may or may not be what you're looking for, and a few of which you might not have considered. Pick one you like or that sounds cool, then build around it. Use it in a sentence, use that sentence in a short paragraph, etc.

I've written entire poems and short stories because I wanted to use a neat word I found while playing around with that wonderful tool.

 

[Geekosaurus]

Bitches, and Hoes.

I concur.

 

[tahrey]

Inability to find a working toilet when you're touching cloth and/or have the runs.
You're welcome.

(I'd be shocked if some nerdcorista hasn't used that already though)

Oh, and there's always that great fallback of the uninspired: Unrequited love. Though from a gamer-type perspective there's the twist of it being because you're crap at it, rather than the target of your affection being fickle or stolen away by someone else. If you choose this path, please, whatever you do, don't James Blunt it.

 

[WINDOWCLEAN2]

Bitches, and Hoes.

"bitches ain't Nuthin but hoes with tricks"


I helped you out with a line there.............

In all seriousness, Never try force lyrics, I just write them when im feleng down or strong about something.

 

[Captain Pancake]

Okay, well it took a while, but here's the finished lyrics:

Verse 1
Trying to save you, seek the truth too,
Mistakes you just repeat
All I wanted, you move on it,
The love you still mistreat
Take a step back, confide in the facts
Can?t you feel the heat?
It?s all in your head, makes you feel dead,
You?ll never share her sheets
Call her out as a common whore, but you should know I?ve seen it all before

Chorus
Now all I see and all I hear is hate,
I?ve heard of you but what of me?
Whatever happened is gone and it?s too late
I?ve felt the same, it wasn?t meant to be
Given up to despair, but it is not your fate
Too caught in yourself, you can?t even see
Until you learn, all you?ll do is wait
I?ve moved on, you can learn from me...

verse 2
I?ve felt the sting too, just let it pass through,
Just learn to let it lie
Only time tells, patience heals well
Once bitten, yet not so shy
Pain makes you moan, I can hear the tone
Makes you stronger, give it a while
Just hope this sinks in, cause all I?m hearing
You?re cutting off, I ask you, why?
I know Love?s labour?s lost, but you overestimate the cost
Chorus
Outro
If that?s all life is for you,
Then you?re going to have to hear me through
This charade will never last
When all your feelings have come to pass


comments and criticisms welcome.