Machinima Help/Advice - Do Want

[Salmaras]

So, a friend and I recently decided to start work on a WoW machinima project.

Now we've started work on the script for our first episode which is being split into Three parts. For this first episode (but not after) we are having three different scriptwriters collaborate on it to try and give each part an identity.

So today i'd like to ask you take a moment out of your day and tell me what you think of our combined efforts. Sadly i can't ask that as my fellow writers have yet to send me the finished copies of their respective works, so here at the very least is part one, which tells the (short) tale of a young, down on his luck Troll Rogue, searching for his big break. (As long as it requires very little effort on his part)

I realise this equates to about a minute and a half of screentime and isn't really very much to look at but i'm interested to get people's opinions and i probably have nothing better to do, so go ahead and give it a look and tell me how bad/awesome/confusing/funny/stupid it is

https://acrobat.com/#d=h*u7KY9fzQOKK9YtYdFxAQ

Incedentally, if anyone does read this i should have another third of the script quite soon, as soon as i can contact my fellow collaborator

Edit: In case anyone is wondering, Malakai is speaking in a jamaican accent which might not have been written properly but will hopefully sound better when someone's actually speaking the lines

 

[Skorpyo]

It's meh. Not good or bad, simply meh.

Over time, it could gain momentum (as these things usually do), so I do encourage you to give it a go.

Just one bit of advice, make it look as clean and professional as possible. No HUD's, clipping, etc.

I look forward to your efforts.

 

[Salmaras]

I look forward to your efforts.

Thank you, our origanal idea was to make the first episode as funny as possible, but then we realised in the time given it was best to focus on the characters, which means it comes out a bit slow, fortunatly once this is behind we're gonna try and give a much better effort for our next script since it should flow alot better.