MGG=REVIEWS-PROTOTYPE

[MGG=REVIEWS]

MGG=REVIEWS-PROTOTYPE

Now I haven?t done a review in quite a while so keep up with me here! Anyway?

This game has been in development for about 4-5 years or so and all the trailers/Demos and previews have so far looked pretty good so when I picked up the game my expectations were pretty high and from what I played, this game lived up to what it promised

Ok you play as Alex mercer you wake up in a morgue escape and are suddenly hunted down by the Blackwatch Army division and after a few close encounters with them he discovers he can Jump great distance, run at superhuman speeds and morph his body into anyone and shape shift his arm into a variety of deadly weapons!
Now what the real charm of prototypes story it isn?t all told to you as the game campaign goes on there are about 130 different people all in the game who knows something about Alex?s past, The nature of the infection what the military is planning etc? And all these people are hidden all over New York must go out and consume them to find out what they know and all this is showed in a..Well I don?t know how to describe it

The Gameplay is enjoyable but cutting through a load of people isn?t as fun as it looks Jumping from building to building running and jumping over cars is, all this can be done but just clicking the RT button and moving where ever you want and now he jumps over anything automatically just run over to and he will flip over it and in the few occasions when rockets are flying by and then it goes into slow motion it looks so movie like and dramatic!
Now there are a few things that bothered me like from the very start the army can call in army strike teams now at the beginning there not so annoying but when your nearing the end they have choppers with rockets the army always resorts to call in strike teams whenever they see you! The AI on the army isn?t the best either like say if I disguise my self as the army run over a wall land off a building and crash land right next to him and he still doesn?t care but the whole point of the game is the army hunting Alex mercer and I am pretty sure super speed and surviving a 5 stories drop are signs of a super mutant! And one more issue the graphics in this game are not terrible but you obviously see they could have done better! But sometimes you can also understand why it isn?t so visually stunning when you see the amount of characters you can have on screen!

Now there isn?t much I can say about this game but trust me it is a good game! Very fun it is one of those game that gets very addicting you just keep wanting to come back to it!

I would give this game a 9.5/10

I know there might be some Grammar problems there always are! but the people who normally checked my reviews haven't done so within a year so i dont want to bother them!

 

[mjhhiv]

MGG is back! Ah, memories...

Frankly, this review doesn't seem as... lacking... as your other reviews. Maybe you've improved, maybe the quality of this section has deteriorated -- I don't know.

I'd say that, yes, your grammar does need a lot of work still. Most of it makes sense, at least. Just put it in a word processor and many of your grammatical errors will be fixed right away. And also, you might want to contact those "people" who helped you a while back. They did seem to help (if I remember correctly, your later reviews were actually grammatically sound). The one other big thing that I'd really recommend aside from having the "normal people" check your reviews is stop writing in such a casual tone. For instance:

Ok you play as Alex mercer...

There's no need for the "OK". It makes it sound like you're frantically telling your friend all of the cool stuff that's happening in Prototype. Honestly, like that throughout the review. The extreme overuse of exclamation points doesn't help, either.

Proofreading it yourself will help, as well as having some of the other forum members look it over. I'm pretty sure that you know that a sentence ends with some for of punctuation, not just by capitalizing the next letter.

The Gameplay is enjoyable but cutting through a load of people isn?t as fun as it looks PERIOD Jumping from building to building...

The last thing I'd suggest, and this is just until you get the basics down, organize your thoughts before you write them down. Think "Story, gameplay, graphics, sound", just so you don't miss anything. I think you tried to do that here, but you still missed a bunch. So when you say:

Now there isn?t much I can say about this game but trust me it is a good game!

I think that you're lazy, because obviously, there's more to say about Prototype than what you've said.

You've got some good ideas, which is half the battle, you just need to figure out how get them down in a written form. Look around at some other reviews and try to emulate them, just to see the basic style a review should be in. If you like reviewing, stick with it. You just need a bunch of practice.

 

[oliveira8]

I think this review is kinda...well...poor.

You missed on alot. First you could have mentioned what platform you played the game for.(Not that is important but there seems to be some issues with the PC and PS3 issues.). Proper use of punctuation, good grammar and spelling in a review doesn't hurt either. Thats why spell checker exists.

The review also doesn't flow very well. Actually...its a big mess and in some parts confusing.By the way what type of game this is? Is it a first person shooter? A third Person Shooter? A Point and click adventure?

You also need to elaborate more on some points. You mention graphics in two lines:

And one more issue the graphics in this game are not terrible but you obviously see they could have done better! But sometimes you can also understand why it isn't so visually stunning when you see the amount of characters you can have on screen!

How come they could be better? How are they bad/average? Its that it feels vague. You say they could be better, you give a possible reason but you don't explain properly.

I didn't play Prototype so I'm just guessing here.

"The graphics from Prototype compared to other big releases this year, are in fact, not that great. The textures don't look that sharp, some of the animation is not very good and the light effects aren't disapointing. Probabaly the main reason for such graphical downgrade is the huge number of NPC's and objects that can fill the screen. But in the end Prototype is still a good looking game, but one wonders if the developers couldn't have done much much more."

Also get rid of the numerical system.

In the end theres room to improve, but this is not a good review. Don't feel bad. I bet there will be other forum members that might give you some tips.

 

[MGG=REVIEWS]

Thanks for the criticism! i don't like putting which console i play on because i was once sent a angry message for selling the game to a particular console! True story!

 

[pigeon_of_doom]

Thanks for the criticism! i don't like putting which console i play on because i was once sent a angry message for selling the game to a particular console! True story!

Don't compromise! As a reviewer you ought to be expected to tell things as they are. You can only testify as to the experiences you had on whichever system you played it on (the experience on PC may have been very different for example) and probably should acknowledge what you did experience the game on. By exposing your thoughts on a public forum, you're vulnerable to a lot of douche-baggery but it's unavoidable.

 

[Dentedgod]

My review of Prototype is much shorter: Just buy it, you'll love it.

 

[oliveira8]

Thanks for the criticism! i don't like putting which console i play on because i was once sent a angry message for selling the game to a particular console! True story!

Ignore those guys. The best thing you can do is at the begining or at the end say:

"This review is based on the *insert game platform here* version of *insert game here*.

And again just ignore the fanboys.

 

[D_987]

MGG=REVIEWS-PROTOTYPE

Now I haven?t done a review in quite a while so keep up with me here! Anyway?

This game has been in development for about 4-5 years or so and all the trailers/demos and previews have so far looked pretty good so when I picked up the game my expectations were pretty high and from what I played, this game lived up to what it promised. This entire paragraph runs on for far to long, try using commas to help break up your work - the only time you did use it broke up the flow but I feel it was mis-placed. It forces an abrupt stop mid-sentence.

Ok you play as Alex mercer you wake up in a morgue escape and are suddenly hunted down by the Blackwatch Army division and after a few close encounters with them he discovers he can Jump great distance, run at superhuman speeds and morph his body into anyone and shape shift his arm into a variety of deadly weapons!
Now what the real charm of Prototype's story it isn?t all told to you This makes no sense as the game's campaign goes on there are about 130 different people all in the game who knows something about Alex?s past. The nature of the infection what the military is planning etc? And all these people are hidden all over New York must go out and consume them to find out what they know and all this is showed in a..Well I don?t know how to describe it. I'm not even going to bother listing the number of simple grammar mistakes in this paragraph. For the second time you failed to place a full-stop and there were a large number of sentences that were poorly phrased or didn't read well. You need to communicate adequately by fully explaining your points - to me it just seems as though you rushed through the story part of the review.

The Gameplay is enjoyable but cutting through a load of people isn?t as fun as it looks Jumping from building to building running and jumping over cars is, all this can be done by just clicking the RT button and moving where ever you want and now he jumps over anything automatically just run over to and he will flip over it and in the few occasions when rockets are flying by and then it goes into slow motion it looks so movie like and dramatic!

Because you forgot to put a full-stop in place this entire paragraph reads as one full sentence. You use the word "but" instead of "by" and, again, it just reads like a mess. You don't commnicate your thoughts to your reader very well, in fact I'd argue you don't communicate your thoughts at all. It reads like a child hurriedly telling his friends something but never quite explaining anything properly "then this happened, and then this...". You need to slow down, stop typing all your thoughts and in this case I'd say plan your work. Create a plan with sections for graphics, gameplay and then type your thoughts on them. From there read each paragraph away from the others and think "if someone where to read this one paragraph on its own would they be able to visualize this section of the game".

Now there are a few things that bothered me like from the very start the army can call in army strike teams now at the beginning there not so annoying but when your nearing the end they have choppers with rockets the army always resorts to call in strike teams whenever they see you! The AI on the army isn?t the best either like say if I disguise my self as the army run over a wall land off a building and crash land right next to him and he still doesn?t care but the whole point of the game is the army hunting Alex Mercer and I am pretty sure super speed and surviving a 5 stories drop are signs of a super mutant! And one more issue the graphics in this game are not terrible but you obviously see they could have done better! But sometimes you can also understand why it isn?t so visually stunning when you see the amount of characters you can have on screen! Again its rushed, its lazy, and its a slog to read due to the poor pacing.

Now there isn?t much I can say about this game but trust me it is a good game! Very fun it is one of those game that gets very addicting you just keep wanting to come back to it!

I would give this game a 9.5/10 Drop the rating, you've been here long enough to know that

I know there might be some Grammar problems there always are! but the people who normally checked my reviews haven't done so within a year so i dont want to bother them! These are not "little" issues - these are issues that make the review extremely difficult to read.

How long did this review take you; to be perfectly honest - its terrible. You need to take your time, use the template idea I suggested and proof-read. I'd normally point out things you didn't talk about and try to help the writer expand on points they have made but there's just no way of doing that when the communication within the review is so lacklustre. I don't know how much help you need; I wasn't around when you were creating these review (I don't think) but if your committed then you need to practise not only your writing ability, but the way you communicate your ideas. Well done on the minimalistic spelling errors and keep trying.

 

[MGG=REVIEWS]

Ok i will edit this review! check back in about 3 hours or so..and see what i have done!