My Book

[EMFCRACKSHOT]

I have mentioned it in a few other threads, but i am an sapiring writer. Ever since i first read the sword of shannara i have wanted to write a fantasy book. So far, i have about 3,000 words. I havent had much time to work on it recently with exams and everything though XD
Terry Brooks has been my greatest influence and people familiar with his work will probably see glaring similarities between this and the word and the void trilogy, even so, its a good distraction and i enjoy it

If you would like to read what i have so far let me know and i will email it to you or something. Feedback would be greatly appreciated. It is my first attempt, and i would like to know if i should keep up with this or go for something different.

 

[Berethond]

Wait.....
A cheap knockoff of LotR inspired you to write another cheap knockoff of a cheap knockoff?

 

[oliveira8]

Can ya give a very little preview of what is about?

Or what is the setting and stuff?

 

[PureChaos]

how about a quick synopsis (think that's the right word) or something?

 

[Dmatix]

Perhaps you should try just posting the first chapter first. It might get you a broader sense of feedback from a lot more people.

 

[neuromasser]

I'm interested, but I don't think I'll have time & concentration to do it before Tuesday, I got some exams :/

 

[Neonbob]

Wait.....
A cheap knockoff of LotR inspired you to write another cheap knockoff of a cheap knockoff?

Oh, Berethond. That is why I love you.
*winks*


And congrats on keeping focused enough to actually put together that much of a story! I usually get fed up by the third page and kill my characters off.

 

[j0z]

I support anyone that wants to write, I am an aspiring writer myself with my own sci-fi novel. Right now it is at 17-18,000 words (larger than animal farm I believe).
I could read it if you want, I haven't read Void, but that might be a good thing.
Aynway, if you want to email it to me, I'm at [email protected]

 

[EMFCRACKSHOT]

Can ya give a very little preview of what is about?

Or what is the setting and stuff?

here are the frst few couple of paragraphs

Bryntoth woke suddenly, bathed in a cold sweat. It was the dreams. Even now he couldn?t escape them. Four years since his failure, four years since he abandoned his path and still they came. Unbidden. Unwanted. Always when he slept. Each dream was different, each one attempting to guide him on his journey. They were always fragmented, never giving him a clear picture of what he was supposed to do. One moment he would be standing with friends in a bright vibrant city, the next he would be stranded in a desolate wasteland, alone, afraid and without his magic to call on. One showed him the future if he was successful, the other showed him his failure. And his failures were becoming ever more apparent.
He tried to ignore them, but it was hard. It was no easy thing to dream the future. Especially one as bleak as this. Every failure shifted the balance further away from the light. Pushing humanity into the embrace of the daemons that poured forth from the netherworld. Every failure brought a new dream, a new hope, and a new despair.
He lay there for what seemed like ages, lost in his thoughts, contemplating his life. He felt as if he failed at everything since that day, four years ago, when he had lost his way. He was leading a company of the king?s guard, the elite troops of Bostratan Kingdom, into battle with a small group of daemons. He had not foreseen the ambush. His men were slaughtered before him. They stood to the last, hacking at their enemies, only to be rent apart by vicious claws and shredded by row upon row of black teeth. He knew he had the power to stop them, but he couldn?t find the will to call it forth. Instead, he ran. Ran as fast as he could and never looked back.

 

[Merteg]

I'm a fan of fantasy and I may enjoy your book. Please post the first page or two so I can see your style.

If it's something I enjoy, it would please me if you sent me the rest.

I can provide some constructive criticism.

 

[Merteg]

Can ya give a very little preview of what is about?

Or what is the setting and stuff?

here are the frst few couple of paragraphs

Bryntoth woke suddenly, bathed in a cold sweat. It was the dreams. Even now he couldn?t escape them. Four years since his failure, four years since he abandoned his path and still they came. Unbidden. Unwanted. Always when he slept. Each dream was different, each one attempting to guide him on his journey. They were always fragmented, never giving him a clear picture of what he was supposed to do. One moment he would be standing with friends in a bright vibrant city, the next he would be stranded in a desolate wasteland, alone, afraid and without his magic to call on. One showed him the future if he was successful, the other showed him his failure. And his failures were becoming ever more apparent.
He tried to ignore them, but it was hard. It was no easy thing to dream the future. Especially one as bleak as this. Every failure shifted the balance further away from the light. Pushing humanity into the embrace of the daemons that poured forth from the netherworld. Every failure brought a new dream, a new hope, and a new despair.
He lay there for what seemed like ages, lost in his thoughts, contemplating his life. He felt as if he failed at everything since that day, four years ago, when he had lost his way. He was leading a company of the king?s guard, the elite troops of Bostratan Kingdom, into battle with a small group of daemons. He had not foreseen the ambush. His men were slaughtered before him. They stood to the last, hacking at their enemies, only to be rent apart by vicious claws and shredded by row upon row of black teeth. He knew he had the power to stop them, but he couldn?t find the will to call it forth. Instead, he ran. Ran as fast as he could and never looked back.

Ah, sounds good.

 

[PureChaos]

sounds quite good but think about your sentance structure. i'm not really one to talk, my book is currently it 46,000 words and needs a LOT of work.

 

[EMFCRACKSHOT]

Wait.....
A cheap knockoff of LotR inspired you to write another cheap knockoff of a cheap knockoff?

The word and the void is nothing like LOTR and all of Brooks other books that were, were far better than LOTR

 

[toasterslayer]

like neonbob said, i kill my characters off too!

 

[Berethond]

Wait.....
A cheap knockoff of LotR inspired you to write another cheap knockoff of a cheap knockoff?

The word and the void is nothing like LOTR and all of Brooks other books that were, were far better than LOTR

I was referring to The Sword of Shannara.

 

[EMFCRACKSHOT]

Wait.....
A cheap knockoff of LotR inspired you to write another cheap knockoff of a cheap knockoff?

The word and the void is nothing like LOTR and all of Brooks other books that were, were far better than LOTR

I was referring to The Sword of Shannara.

It may be something of a knockoff, but if you ask me its much more enjoyable. Also, all writers tend to copy off the people who have influenced them most, at least thats the case in my experience

 

[thedailylunatic]

As a guy who's in a similar writing situation, here's my advice:

1) Read and re-read all of the classics and take them to heart (LOTR, Dune, etc.)
2) Go to the TVTropes wiki and look through all of the pages you can stand (be warned, there are thousands). Figure out all of the bad writing cliches that could prop up in your work and mercilessly weed them out. Then run ALL of your major characters through the Universal Mary Sue Litmus Test (http://www.springhole.net/quizzes/marysue.htm).
3) Go to writing workshops in your area. LOTS of them.
4) Try to write something original. Start with themes, then work on plots, and try to divorce them as much as possible from every work that you worship. Leave the parallels and homages to those who'll do it a lot better than you. It wouldn't hurt to read Hero With a Thousand Faces either.

 

[iJosh]

So far it does sound good. Good choice in words and such.

 

[thedailylunatic]

Can ya give a very little preview of what is about?

Or what is the setting and stuff?

here are the frst few couple of paragraphs

Bryntoth woke suddenly, bathed in a cold sweat. It was the dreams. Even now he couldn?t escape them. Four years since his failure, four years since he abandoned his path and still they came. Unbidden. Unwanted. Always when he slept. Each dream was different, each one attempting to guide him on his journey. They were always fragmented, never giving him a clear picture of what he was supposed to do. One moment he would be standing with friends in a bright vibrant city, the next he would be stranded in a desolate wasteland, alone, afraid and without his magic to call on. One showed him the future if he was successful, the other showed him his failure. And his failures were becoming ever more apparent.
He tried to ignore them, but it was hard. It was no easy thing to dream the future. Especially one as bleak as this. Every failure shifted the balance further away from the light. Pushing humanity into the embrace of the daemons that poured forth from the netherworld. Every failure brought a new dream, a new hope, and a new despair.
He lay there for what seemed like ages, lost in his thoughts, contemplating his life. He felt as if he failed at everything since that day, four years ago, when he had lost his way. He was leading a company of the king?s guard, the elite troops of Bostratan Kingdom, into battle with a small group of daemons. He had not foreseen the ambush. His men were slaughtered before him. They stood to the last, hacking at their enemies, only to be rent apart by vicious claws and shredded by row upon row of black teeth. He knew he had the power to stop them, but he couldn?t find the will to call it forth. Instead, he ran. Ran as fast as he could and never looked back.

Ha! I see you read the Battle of Maldon

The writing works, but I'd recommend doing less telling and more showing. Focus less on telling us about the dreams and maybe show us a dream or two or show us more about the protagonist's perspective (the room, the inside of his eyelids, anything). "Showing not telling" is a major issue that beginner writers need to learn how to do.

My laptop's about to die. I'll be back later.

 

[EMFCRACKSHOT]

Ha! I see you read the Battle of Maldon

The writing works, but I'd recommend doing less telling and more showing. Focus less on telling us about the dreams and maybe show us a dream or two or show us more about the protagonist's perspective (the room, the inside of his eyelids, anything). "Showing not telling" is a major issue that beginner writers need to learn how to do.

My laptop's about to die. I'll be back later.

Ihave included a dream or two later on, but i see what you mean about more 'showing'. Thanks for the input