My Opening Page.

[j0z]

No government or maybe a theocracy? But then who is running The School? I would go with a theocracy with maybe some Orwellian undertones. Maybe have them brainwashing the kids for an army?

I was thinking of it being more of a right of passage thing were society sends them to grow up but doesn't let them come back till it is over. I was also planning for it to started of as an Orwellian government project.

Sounds good. You will have to do the young hero part well.

Pretty good start, but I'd like to know where this is going. Is it an adventure-type story, or a "defeat the oppressing power"-type, or something else?

I honestly dont know yet. I have some feeling for the middle part of the book and I have a few ideas for the end but how it goes is anyone's guess.

I vote for fight the power

 

[Simriel]

The 'Young Hero' thing has been heavily over done. It is getting kind of boring now. Only Authors like Colfer and Horowitz can really pull it off.

Not really a young hero what Im going for more along the lines of Amelie being the catalyst of a series of events but not the Hero. The Hero was going to be someone older.

Worked for the Skulduggery Pleasant series

 

[Lyri]

I think I am due the Morpheus badge.

I am too, I asked a Mod after I didn't get it the day after Going Gonzo and was told I have no ban history so I should have it.

So I have to wait for further information.

I think it's 1500.

*sniperoo*

Looks good, wouldn't mind reading more to get a better feel for the story.

 

[Agent Larkin]

I think I am due the Morpheus badge.

I am too, I asked a Mod after I didn't get it the day after Going Gonzo and was told I have no ban history so I should have it.

So I have to wait for further information.

I think it's 1500.

*sniperoo*

Looks good, wouldn't mind reading more to get a better feel for the story.

Ill probably start a new thread if I come up with any more.

 

[Agent Larkin]

Interesting read,but hard to judge fragments of a story,as you never know the setting or the characters,ive been through some fantasy writing forums for a couple of years and i love reading this stuff,(especially at places such as elder scrolls website,epic fantasy jingles my bells) so if you would be so kind as to post some more of the story for us to read that would be great

When I think of it I will.