New Superhero Idea

[Everin]

What do you think of a new superhero that can run super fast, jump super high and can heal at a slow rate. He is hunted by a group that can teleport and have sworn to defeat him. The evil group creates other mutants to fight him, like someone that can conduct electricity or someone that can shape-shift into the people around him. The superhero has to fight these people and find out why he has received these new powers.
What do you think?
(It's for an animated television series as well, not a comic)

 

[Daipire]

What do you think of a new superhero that can run super fast, jump super high and can heal at a slow rate. He is hunted by a group that can teleport and have sworn to defend him. The evil group creates other mutants to fight him, like someone that can conduct electricity or someone that can shape-shift into the people around him. The superhero has to fight these people and find out why he has received these new powers.
What do you think?

If they have sworn to protect him, why would they hunt him? :S

And you gotta have an origin story too.

 

[Everin]

What do you think of a new superhero that can run super fast, jump super high and can heal at a slow rate. He is hunted by a group that can teleport and have sworn to defeat him. The evil group creates other mutants to fight him, like someone that can conduct electricity or someone that can shape-shift into the people around him. The superhero has to fight these people and find out why he has received these new powers.
What do you think?

If they have sworn to protect him, why would they hunt him? :S

And you gotta have an origin story too.

my bad with the spelling. I fixed it now
The origins is that he is chosen in another line of superheros to defend the human race from the fellows that teleport, and the mutants they create.

 

[Wintermoot]

Everyman from The Simpsons is a good concept he absorbs the super powers from comic,s he touches

 

[Jenny Creed]

It doesn't actually say anything. It's not a character, it's a powerset. Spider-man, for example, isn't a thing with spider powers, he's a man fueled by an enormous sense of responsibility and guilt. That's what makes him a character with the potential to have interesting stories. If you want to design a story around the abilities of the hero that's fine, but if you want to make anyone want to read it it's best you make him a believable, involving character. Some people would have you believe characters is everything to a story, and you can't write something that isn't based on characters, but that's an exaggeration. It's just very, very hard. Characters make it easier; in fact if you write a good enough character or five they'll write the story for you. And if you're just starting to write you want all the help you can get.

 

[Everin]

It doesn't actually say anything. It's not a character, it's a powerset. Spider-man, for example, isn't a thing with spider powers, he's a man fueled by an enormous sense of responsibility and guilt. That's what makes him a character with the potential to have interesting stories. If you want to design a story around the abilities of the hero that's fine, but if you want to make anyone want to read it it's best you make him a believable, involving character. Some people would have you believe characters is everything to a story, and you can't write something that isn't based on characters, but that's an exaggeration. It's just very, very hard. Characters make it easier; in fact if you write a good enough character or five they'll write the story for you. And if you're just starting to write you want all the help you can get.

I'm not starting the story, I'm sending it away to producers. One has already displayed interest in it. The 13 episodes I've written allow you to further understand the superhero.

 

[SpecklePattern]

Those are just cliche superpowers in my eyes

Youtube: CollegeHumor: Hardly Working: Animated Superpowers [http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g8PmZiXle6c]
Tuotube: CollegeHumor: Hardly Working: Animated Superpowers 2 [http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rixKzXZcgPc]

Dibs on the instant diarrhea! xD

 

[Billion Backs]

It doesn't actually say anything. It's not a character, it's a powerset. Spider-man, for example, isn't a thing with spider powers, he's a man fueled by an enormous sense of responsibility and guilt. That's what makes him a character with the potential to have interesting stories. If you want to design a story around the abilities of the hero that's fine, but if you want to make anyone want to read it it's best you make him a believable, involving character. Some people would have you believe characters is everything to a story, and you can't write something that isn't based on characters, but that's an exaggeration. It's just very, very hard. Characters make it easier; in fact if you write a good enough character or five they'll write the story for you. And if you're just starting to write you want all the help you can get.

What he said.

There really isn't any information that can provide something about the quality of the comic in the OP here.

You've given us some kind of skeletal outline that would be the same for just about every hero. You've given us some power sets that I can almost guarantee were already done by some other hero - in the almost a century worth of super hero comics, there really aren't too many powers and origin stories that weren't explored (And most of them so, so deliciously bad. There's a reason there are so few mainstream heroes). It's like rule 34, literally everything you can think of was probably already done when it comes to powers.

So, yeah, characters. A lot of that.

 

[Trippy Turtle]

should give the hero ways to tele-proof areas like his hq

 

[Everin]

It doesn't actually say anything. It's not a character, it's a powerset. Spider-man, for example, isn't a thing with spider powers, he's a man fueled by an enormous sense of responsibility and guilt. That's what makes him a character with the potential to have interesting stories. If you want to design a story around the abilities of the hero that's fine, but if you want to make anyone want to read it it's best you make him a believable, involving character. Some people would have you believe characters is everything to a story, and you can't write something that isn't based on characters, but that's an exaggeration. It's just very, very hard. Characters make it easier; in fact if you write a good enough character or five they'll write the story for you. And if you're just starting to write you want all the help you can get.

What he said.

There really isn't any information that can provide something about the quality of the comic in the OP here.

You've given us some kind of skeletal outline that would be the same for just about every hero. You've given us some power sets that I can almost guarantee were already done by some other hero - in the almost a century worth of super hero comics, there really aren't too many powers and origin stories that weren't explored (And most of them so, so deliciously bad. There's a reason there are so few mainstream heroes). It's like rule 34, literally everything you can think of was probably already done when it comes to powers.

So, yeah, characters. A lot of that.

I can't go into too much detail because it's being looked over by producers and if they think that actual main story is already in the public, they'll reject it without a second thought. I can only give you the skeletal outline at the moment.

 

[Billion Backs]

It doesn't actually say anything. It's not a character, it's a powerset. Spider-man, for example, isn't a thing with spider powers, he's a man fueled by an enormous sense of responsibility and guilt. That's what makes him a character with the potential to have interesting stories. If you want to design a story around the abilities of the hero that's fine, but if you want to make anyone want to read it it's best you make him a believable, involving character. Some people would have you believe characters is everything to a story, and you can't write something that isn't based on characters, but that's an exaggeration. It's just very, very hard. Characters make it easier; in fact if you write a good enough character or five they'll write the story for you. And if you're just starting to write you want all the help you can get.

What he said.

There really isn't any information that can provide something about the quality of the comic in the OP here.

You've given us some kind of skeletal outline that would be the same for just about every hero. You've given us some power sets that I can almost guarantee were already done by some other hero - in the almost a century worth of super hero comics, there really aren't too many powers and origin stories that weren't explored (And most of them so, so deliciously bad. There's a reason there are so few mainstream heroes). It's like rule 34, literally everything you can think of was probably already done when it comes to powers.

So, yeah, characters. A lot of that.

I can't go into too much detail because it's being looked over by producers and if they think that actual main story is already in the public, they'll reject it without a second thought. I can only give you the skeletal outline at the moment.

But that's the point, the skeletal outline is completely worthless considering that every hero story - not only super heroes, although those can be way easier - can be reduced down to practically the same skeletal outline.

Might as well not bother, because you won't get anything constructive out of it. The overall plot is almost the opposite of new, the powers are also not exactly original (especially considering how old super hero fiction is) and that's all everyone can say about this whole thing. And no, of course not, not every super hero has to be completely original when it comes to powers or even motivations. Because at the core, it also comes down to very limiting choices, as every hero story goes.

Since you can't really release any information on how you plan to make that interesting, and that's reasonable given your claimed circumstances (this is internet after all), this entire discussion is pretty much obsolete. We can't critique or give any advice because we don't know what exactly you're doing at this point. And frankly, there are probably better places then here to ask any type of advice or criticism. Internets are internets.