This is a bit of a short story I am writing for fun, please give me your thoughts and tell me what I should correct.
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"BLARGghgarhg!" said Ruffus, my pet zombie, as I took away his chewtoy, a recently deceased raccoon he found one night. "Thats enough Ruffus, lets play some ball." I said in a demanding voice. "Gagahahgrgag" mumbled Rufus as he reluctantly got up. The forty year old zombie's green skin shimmered disturbingly in the sun-light, it scared the shit out of me. "Catch!" I shouted as I gently tossed him the ball. Ruffus followed the ball with his eyes but did not move, the ball hit him on the head, the large metallic collar on his neck let out a beep as ruffus become to be more aware. "Wareeregrg" he said as he took a step back in confusion. I let out a sigh of frustration, Ruffus was the slowest zombie on the block, he couldn't even run. "Come on boy, pass it." I said as kindly as I could. Ruffus slowly grabbed the ball and lazily threw it.
I caught the ball with my jaw hanging in awe, this was the first time Ruffus ever returned the ball. "Good boy." I said lovingly "Catch this one." I threw it even harder than before to see just how much he actually learned, Ruffus caught it with ease, his collar began to beep like crazy. He smiled, showing green rotting teeth, I smiled in return, I was actually enjoying playing with Ruffus. "Thats what I'm talking about, now throw it as hard as you can." With a rather loud grunt, Ruffus threw the ball with an incredible force, it hissed as it flashed towards me. I gasped as I dodged the ball by a single hair, that throw was inhuman, . "RArarahgrgRAFAGh!" Screamed Ruffus triumphantly, at his terrifyingly powerful throw. Suddenlly, I hear a loud thunk behind me followed by Ruffus smashing into the floor with a thud. I stared confusingly at the uncounsciouos zombie, the ball laid on his stomach, I turned around, a large bump was molded onto the side of my dad's car. "Uh oh" I whispered to myself. "Bllllurghr...." mumbleded Ruffus, I helped him up. "You okay Ru-" My hair stood up, there lied Ruffus's broken collar, several meters away from the zombie's neck. I looked at Ruffus, a blank expression was glued to his face.
To be continued....
Thankies
"BLARGghgarhg!" said Ruffus, my pet zombie, as I took away his chewtoy, a recently deceased raccoon he found one night. "Thats enough Ruffus, lets play some ball." I said in a demanding voice. "Gagahahgrgag" mumbled Rufus as he reluctantly got up. The forty year old zombie's green skin shimmered disturbingly in the sun-light, it scared the shit out of me. "Catch!" I shouted as I gently tossed him the ball. Ruffus followed the ball with his eyes but did not move, the ball hit him on the head, the large metallic collar on his neck let out a beep as ruffus become to be more aware. "Wareeregrg" he said as he took a step back in confusion. I let out a sigh of frustration, Ruffus was the slowest zombie on the block, he couldn't even run. "Come on boy, pass it." I said as kindly as I could. Ruffus slowly grabbed the ball and lazily threw it.
I caught the ball with my jaw hanging in awe, this was the first time Ruffus ever returned the ball. "Good boy." I said lovingly "Catch this one." I threw it even harder than before to see just how much he actually learned, Ruffus caught it with ease, his collar began to beep like crazy. He smiled, showing green rotting teeth, I smiled in return, I was actually enjoying playing with Ruffus. "Thats what I'm talking about, now throw it as hard as you can." With a rather loud grunt, Ruffus threw the ball with an incredible force, it hissed as it flashed towards me. I gasped as I dodged the ball by a single hair, that throw was inhuman, . "RArarahgrgRAFAGh!" Screamed Ruffus triumphantly, at his terrifyingly powerful throw. Suddenlly, I hear a loud thunk behind me followed by Ruffus smashing into the floor with a thud. I stared confusingly at the uncounsciouos zombie, the ball laid on his stomach, I turned around, a large bump was molded onto the side of my dad's car. "Uh oh" I whispered to myself. "Bllllurghr...." mumbleded Ruffus, I helped him up. "You okay Ru-" My hair stood up, there lied Ruffus's broken collar, several meters away from the zombie's neck. I looked at Ruffus, a blank expression was glued to his face.
To be continued....
