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watchman 2353

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Hello members of the escapist community,
Below is a speak I wrote for English and was contemplating submitting to my school's literary arts magazine. What do you think? Note: the speech is spoken in a mock heroic tone.


The Pen is a Sword!
Edit: My name use to go here.

Argumentation is the truest competition of the mind. It is the sport of the intellectual, where one man can pit his mind against another in the spirit of competition. It is a dual of the minds; where our thoughts are swords, flying about the air in a constant struggle to impale the opponent?s chest, so that we can proclaim victory to all that are around. Our thoughts are swords, and our facts are our shields. We are constant weaving in and out, with rebuttals and questions striking blows to our opponent?s armor until it cracks. Their defenses, made of syllogism and rhetoric, are their only protection from our blade of truth! It is an epic contest, comparable to that of Beowulf and Grendel, or Achilles and Hector.
How did we craft the sword of truth? How do we construct such a powerful weapon? It is out of the pure strength of our words that the sword is forged in the fire of thought. It is pounded into shape by our logic, and made to strike fast and true. It is built to pierce opponent?s armor, made of lies, and shatter it. It is enchanted by the magic of language, and hardened with our experience. The warrior of word picks up his sword of truth and uses it to attack his opponent. He jabs his blade towards his opponent with each sentence, and with each point he slashes his blade at their chest. The well crafted sword slices clean through the opponent?s rhetoric, leaving his points naked before the audience. A sword crafted of language and wielded with experience will cut through your opponents like butter.
As any warrior of great would attest, battle is not all with the sword alone. The shield is just as important. Any man can walk into a room and throw stones at a knight, yet the truest of warriors would come in ready to actually compete in combat, to defend themselves instead of cut and run. A good arguer will come ready to block the blows of their opponent?s. The Warrior?s shield will be of glistening rhetoric. Their Shield will be well crafted by the finest of tools, using similes and metaphors, to catch your opponent?s sword and make him fumble it towards the ground. Their mail will be of reason, brandishing the pure strength of logic. Their opponent?s blade will fall upon the mail and crack, shattering into pieces under the integrity of its steel.
It is commonly said that the pen is mightier than the sword. This is untrue; the pen is a sword, ready to fight for truth! The truest of warriors do not fight their battles with guns and grenades, but will craft their weapons with logic and truth! Any man can kill another, yet to truly defeat them you need to destroy their ideas, to eliminate their martyrdom. The pen is a weapon of truth instead of tyranny. It is a tool, created by man to present knowledge to all that will listen. As we argue, we try to spread our knowledge, to educate others in the ways of our reasoning. IT IS TRUTH THAT WILL PREVAIL!
 

a7r0p05

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DM992 said:
...yet to truly defeat them you need to destroy their ideas, to eliminate their martyrdom.
That part comes on a little strong, at least in my opinion.
Also...
Dual: Being of two parts or having two aspects of being
Duel: A competition between two parties
 

Necrophagist

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PS Read the Epic of Gilgamesh, parts of the Illiad, and Beowulf THOROUGHLY then do a re-write. Also, try some content rather than just rhetoric. I know it's rhetoric you're going for, but if it's rooted in something, your words will mean something. Whose ideas are wrong, who is right? Who are the martyrs?
 

watchman 2353

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a7r0p05 said:
DM992 said:
...yet to truly defeat them you need to destroy their ideas, to eliminate their martyrdom.
That part comes on a little strong, at least in my opinion.
Originally I didn't think so, yet my public teaching teacher gave me a similar comment. It is funny, at my school public speaking is 10% people interested in speeches, 70% going for a make-up English credit, and 20% people shooting for easy As.
 

watchman 2353

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The speech is not about right or wrong, or even ideas. It is aiming to portray the feeling of how a debate, or argument, moves and flows and feels to the debaters. In a debate, the ideas don't matter, your opponent is wrong. You just have to convince others of it.
 

Necrophagist

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DM992 said:
The speech is not about right or wrong, or even ideas. It is aiming to portray the feeling of how a debate, or argument, moves and flows and feels to the debaters. In a debate, the ideas don't matter, your opponent is wrong. You just have to convince others of it.
I'm a former champion LD and Policy debater. Ideas certainly do matter. In fact, in Lincoln-Douglas debate, it is only your ideas that matter. Speaking well is important, but if you don't have the moral or ethical high ground, you have no debate. Perhaps you need to focus on what you're trying to say.
 

zoozilla

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I thought it would be horrible based on the fact that your thread title is misspelled, but it actually wasn't too bad.

Some grammar issues, definitely. You switched between different tenses sometimes, which made some parts a little confusing.
 

DoW Lowen

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A bit didactic, needs some polishing such as grammar. But all in all, well written. What is this for? A high school thing?
 

INF1NIT3 D00M

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You spelled 'speech' incorrectly as the forum title.
Its speEch, not speAch.
Sorry. Also, you put 'this is a speak i wrote'. To speak is to say something aloud. You meant a speech, which is something you write, then recite. Another thing, the 'dual' bit is supposed to be 'duel'.

But you know what? It was damn well written. I could criticize all day, and that is indeed what I came onto this thread to do. I came here saying "Ha, this person intends to converse about speech in the english language, yet cannot spell" and left saying "That person may have misspelled a few things, but they have a pretty good grasp of english language arts". That was a pretty cool essay you wrote, and I hope you got an A on your assignment...
 

watchman 2353

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I did. The reason I originally didn't care about spelling was due to the fact it is a speech, I didn't have to pass in a written copy.