The Escapist Film Festival 2010: Jetman Jam

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Jetman Jam

A Sci-Fi comedy, Jetman Jam introduces the galaxy's greatest coward.
- Finding himself trapped by his arch-nemesis, Jam learns just how little Xeneerions understand human beings.

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steverivers

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If it shows that i bought my graphics tablet 1 day after the contest was announced, i apologize wholeheartedly!
 

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steverivers said:
If it shows that i bought my graphics tablet 1 day after the contest was announced, i apologize wholeheartedly!
Video's fine, but the audio has a bit of an echo. Dialogue's a bit forced at points, but That's one of the things that gets better as time goes on. I'm looking forward to more.
 

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Well, it just wasn't my thing I guess, I didn't laugh. It could be that I really can't bother to read subtitles. I understand using them when everybody in a show is speaking a different language, or if the alien language being spoken isn't understood by the main character, so people might want to know what the aliens are saying.

But with this, the main character knows what the worms are saying in their language and they understand him. That makes no sense, if they know each others languages, than speak one and be done with it. Subtitles always detract from the viewing experience, especially when they are too long and go by way too fast. I found myself having to pause the video to read the subtitles. If I have to do that with a show, that is an immediate thumbs down. Visual media should be a fluid experience.
 

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I thought it was awesome! He does have a point about the language thing, but that can be easily corrected in following issues. You did a great job! You had original ideas, and your graphics were very clean! Nice concept, and I hope you win because I can't wait to see more of your adventures!
 

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Pah, terrible jokes, appalling attempts at toilet humour (I am a connoisseur of shit jokes), and an ending gag that feels ripped from Monty Python's Quest for the Holy Grail. It would have been a funnier joke for the aliens to keep introducing more girls each time the captor resisted; he'd think he was onto something good so he'd keep goading them on; They keep warning him that they will unleash the ultimate torture; He willfully encourages them to do so; and finally, they release a huge male porn star; end on the captor's reaction shot.

Also, rather than subbing the aliens, you should have given them their own accent/funny voice.

I'm sorry, but this really needs a lot of work.
 

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maninahat said:
and an ending gag that feels ripped from Monty Python's Quest for the Holy Grail.
I had the same thought. Also a wall of text is a good way to put people off instantly...
 

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The text wall was a bit of a let down, but overall I liked it. It was funny, had some great moments and a good feel/look. As for the subtitled Alien language that was mysteriously understood...I took that as a Star Wars parody...I'd just tell people that's what you were doing, because in that context I laughed pretty hard