the ghost diaries

[buddee1]

Look sorry to be blunt, you don't strike me as someone who will do very well as an author. You misspelt read on one occasions. And the bit you just posted was that a finished draft? Its short as hell. I like the concept I jsust don't think you will be able to pull it off.

eric mays was very fat.

Okay...

1. Name = Capital
2. Err very... Bland

Here try this.

Eric Mays was little over fifteen years old, still in his third year of secondary schooling. Unfortunately for him he weighed over 300 pounds and was for that reason often the but of everybody's jokes. Couple this with him mentality issues he just a step away from falling into insanity. And one day he did.

That's off the top of my head, and while I write for a hobby, and hopefully better than the majority of fifteen year olds out there, I am by no means brilliant. Good is pushing it but some say that I am.

well thats just from my memory i not posting on the computer i wrote it on but thanks man that actually is a lot better than what i posted

 

[FallenRainbows]

Look sorry to be blunt, you don't strike me as someone who will do very well as an author. You misspelt read on one occasions. And the bit you just posted was that a finished draft? Its short as hell. I like the concept I jsust don't think you will be able to pull it off.

eric mays was very fat.

Okay...

1. Name = Capital
2. Err very... Bland

Here try this.

Eric Mays was little over fifteen years old, still in his third year of secondary schooling. Unfortunately for him he weighed over 300 pounds and was for that reason often the but of everybody's jokes. Couple this with him mentality issues he just a step away from falling into insanity. And one day he did.

That's off the top of my head, and while I write for a hobby, and hopefully better than the majority of fifteen year olds out there, I am by no means brilliant. Good is pushing it but some say that I am.

well thats just from my memory i not posting on the computer i wrote it on but thanks man that actually is a lot better than what i posted

I just finished writing some of my own novel actually, so I'm a bit dead on ideas, I like to leave some time so I don't "Jump the shark" as it were. But really:

Capitalise your "I"'s
Thats = That's
"i not posting" = I'm / I am not posting

I'm not usually so big on grammar, and if it irks me I don't complain but if your into writing you should work on it quite a bit. I wish you all the luck. I advise getting a spellcheaker too I have one because I often hit/miss certain keys due to the fact my hands are not completely under my control. If you get a good one or just run it trough MS Office it will also correct grammatical errors to. Keep at it I like the concept but it seems that your lacking the talent. But you can always learn. If you really want to keep at it.

 

[NeutralMunchHotel]

Someone sure is lazy

What do I get? Your name published on a book of my ideas?

no i cant change the book now since its already to far along in the publishing proses i just thought it would be cool to see some of your ideas

You wrote a book with that grammar?

Pass my condolences onto your publisher...

 

[johnman]

13 ghosts was a terriable film in every sense of the word.