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interspark

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not long ago, a friend of mine posted a link to my webcomic asking for opinions, and they were bad. I appreciate the fact that my first comic sucked hell which is why ive re-made it and would now like a second opinion


and heres the link if you want to read on

http://interspark.smackjeeves.com/comics/890090/regestration-of-an-interspark/
 

Stoic raptor

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I think you could have done better, but I like the idea of the joke.

Well, its only your 2nd comic. At least try to improve the art. Just looking at it gives you the impression that it is bad.
 

Bobic

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Well that was quite unfunny.

Also those MSpaint drawings look wickedly amateurish.
 

interspark

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Stoic raptor said:
I think you could have done better, but I like the idea of the joke.

Well, its only your 2nd comic. At least try to improve the art. Just looking at it gives you the impression that it is bad.
actually, the series goes on for about 60 pages if you click the link, i like to think the humour improves as the story developes
 

Rarhnor

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I see everyone else have expressed my exact opinion.

I could've beent the first to post here, but I skipped the chance of being an asshole, and took a U-turn.
 

blankedboy

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Well, the art lacks effort, the jokes appear ad hoc, which is bad, you don't seem to know much about engines, and you added in an arbitrary biography page.

I think you need to look at what other people are doing with their webcomics, look at xkcd, Penny Arcade, Ctrl+Alt+Del...

EDIT: Oh yeah, the text boxes are hard to follow. I read up to about page 20 or so.
 

T-Bone24

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I feel that the writing needs some serious work, above all. Maybe try collaborating on the writing with friends. It'll help you know what people find funny and will help your style along the way.

There is potential.
 

Palademon

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I like the idea of the joke and the over the top name of the place, whereas other people are being more sceptical. I think if you had a more complex art style, some exaggerated facial experssions would of sold it.