UltraNerds Been hacked.

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Radelaide

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Okay, basically I had this idea that I was going to write a series on one shots about my friends in a superhero comic way. And I haven't quite finished. I'm gunna post what I've got and I'd kinda like some feedback from you guys!

Feel free to criticise away!

Also, ideas would be helpful!
 

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Episode 1
UltraNerd?s been Hacked!

?Jono, great work with that code! It debugged the new Metrosoft software. We?ve just got to add a few extra things and we?re done! I guess you?re done too. I think Mark wants to see you so he can pay you. You should go see him,? said a perky voice from behind.
Jono rose from the desk and turned to see Kasey. The software manager?s assistant.
Jono had been admiring the long legs of Kasey for about 4 months. Or the time he had been working at Metrosoft.
?Hmm, Kasey?? Asked Jono in a playful, curious tone.
?Yes Jono?? she replied as she waved her hand, advising him to follow her.
?What are you doing Friday night? I had plans with my sister for a night of bowling at ?Ten Pins? but she cancelled and I was wondering if you wanted to come with me?? Jono inquired, still in a playful tone.
?Sure. But I?ve got some stuff I have to do at about seven thirty. Can I meet you at about eight thirty??
?Simply perfect? he answered with a charming smile.
Kasey smiled back and opened her boss?s door.


Later... Like that Friday.


Jono walked into his apartment. After turning on the lights and music, he sat down to do some work on his computer. Suddenly, an Instant Message appears on his screen.

?PowerPlay. Hi? he repeats to himself.
CSSChamp: Hi. Uh, who are you?
PowerPlay: It doesn?t matter. I have something for you. Accept the file.
The mysterious person instructs. A pop-up box asks if he wants to accept ?HDDH.pmt?
CSSChamp: What is it? I have a rule about not accepting unknown files.
PowerPlay: It has important information for you.
?Hmm? This is too suspect? Jono says to himself. He begins to type again.
CSSChamp: Sorry, no deal.
PowerPlay: Fine. Your mistake, UltraNerd.
PowerPlay has left.

?What? How did they know who I was?? Jono said to himself, stunned.
He got up. Jono was puzzled. He way trying to figure out whom ?PowerPlay? was when his train of thought was derailed when his phone started to ring.
?Hello?? he answered.
?Jono! Major Fabio here. The city is in peril. We need UltraNerd!?
?On my way,? Jono replied, and then hung up.
He pressed a button under his computer desk and a buzz sounded from his bedroom. He walked into his bedroom where a door had appeared from a bookshelf. He grabbed a small, silver device from his bedside table and entered the doorway then descended down a metallic staircase.

?Dell! You down here?? he yelled into the round room, stopping short of a shiny, black roadster. The crash of metal-on-metal sounded out and Jono looked down.
?Yeah, I?m down here. What?s up?? Dell said as she rolled out from underneath the car.
?City in trouble. So I will get changed. Can you get my gear ready?? Jono asked as he walked behind a wall.
Dell rubbed some grease off her face. ?They?re already good to go. I tuned the multi-meter last night after you broke the screen on it. I?ve restocked everything and adjusted the screen on your communicator. It now has a live feed back here with a new camera I installed so I can see everything while I?m back manning the NerdCave.? She grabbed his cape.
?Would you stop calling it that? And thank you. Have you had dinner? Want me to pick you up something on the way home?? Jono asked as he had his cape put on by Dell.
?No, I?m ok. I?ll just order out. Anyway, get going. I?m getting the information now. I?ll send it to your communicator when I get it. And you?re taking the bike. I?m still fixing the fuel line on the roadster from the tear on it,? she said as she walked around the car and wheeled out a black and green road bike.
?Ok, I?m gone!? Jono? Or should I say UltraNerd said triumphantly as he jumped onto the bike and sped away.

A beep from his communicator means Dell is calling him. He reaches up and presses the button and the visor slides out in front of his eyes.
?Dell? What?s going on?? UltraNerd asks.
?Right. The Metrosoft building has been broken into. I?m looking at their security cameras now. The thief is still there. Be careful! It?s a chick!?
?A woman? Damn. This is gunna have a whole Batman Catwoman thing going on. She?d better not be hot?
?From the footage I?ve got, she?s hot. Sorry dude?
?No matter, Dell. I promise not to woo her with my charm.?
?Yeah, cause that worked last time.? Dell muttered under her breath.
?Well, this had better be quick. I?ve got a date tonight?
?You?d better hurry, she?s nearly done!?
?Right!? Jono? UltraNerd said as his bike turned around a corner and into the parking lot of Metrosoft car park, wheels screeching.

In the building, Hacker is having her way with the computer containing all the new software!


?This is just too easy? This will be easy to sell? Hacker said to herself as her fingers worked quickly over the keyboard, cracking encrypting codes with ease.
?You know,? UltraNerd appeared out of the shadows, ?If you keep that up, I might just have to tie you up and leave you,? he said. ?I mean, leave you here for the police to find!? UltraNerd quickly added after realising what he had said.
?Smooth move, Casanova? Dell said in his ear.
Hacker turned on her chair. Her short black fringe hanging over her eye, ?Oh really? And you are??
?Me? I?m UltraNerd. Oh yeah, I know how that sounds, but I?m here to foil whatever it is that you?re doing?, he pronounced with a cliché tone.
Hacker rose up out of her chair and walked towards him. He became hypnotised with the way she carried herself.
?Oh really? Do you know what I?m doing?? Hacker said in a seductive tone.
?By the looks of it, you?re decrypting that code. Oh, and you?ve failed too.? He pointed over her shoulder.
?Damn it! Oh well, I?ve got most of what I need,? she turned and grabbed the USB attached to the computer, ?I should be able to figure out the rest.?
?You?re not leaving, not with that code. It?s new software. I?m not letting you have it.? UltraNerd sternly said.
?You don?t have a choice.? Hacker replied as she turned to him. He lunged to stop her and she pushed the swivel chair in to his legs, tripping him over. She jumped over him and ran out the door.
?Why do they always run? Dell, where is she??
?Not sure. She?s scrambled my signal. Leave it. She?ll have to come back for the code again. I only gave her a dummy one,? Dell giggled to herself. ?Anyway, you?re late for your very important date.?
UltraNerd looked at his watch, ?Damn, I am too. Okay, I?ll duck home and get changed.?
?No need. I packed you a collared shirt and pants. Just go around the back of the alley and get changed.? Dell informed him.
?You, my dear are a lifesaver.?
 

Radelaide

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fish food carl said:
Well, that was fast. But, since we cannot see the comic there is little to criticize, but good luck!
It's a story. I just posted it. Ugh, sorry. I didn't wanna make my OP a wall of text.