I'm a wannabe writer with at least one book under his belt (just three bucks Kindle, Link at the bottom).
but others are also likewise wannabe writers in books, comics, or even fanfic. SO lets put our heads together and try to help each other with tips and tricks we did or saw done right, and learn from went so horribly wrong. And I will have pictures since I tend to write alot and people need a visual break. Given the subject matter, they will be safe for work. Also some mild spoilers as I wil have some excamples.
So, Sex; procreation; mating; boinking; Coitis; shagging; hooking up; copulation; fornication; getting biblical; to know him/her; to become better strangers, country matters; interourse; intimacy; love making; to have relations with someone; a sexual congress; and several variations of a word that starts with an F.
While the Asexuals on the forum may be bewildered why the rest of humanity are into it. It feels good. THere are over thirty thousand hypersensitive nerve endings in the happy parts, and several areas on the human body are endroginous zones. We write songs about this, we tell stories of this, we make fine art of it.
Unfortunately when done right you can hear a heavenly chorus sing. When done wrong we understand why the Aces in the room gets squeaked by this. We have all read or watched a love making scene in a book or film and most of us either though: "Oh yes" or "that's it?"
ANd frankly despite something that is programed into most of us on a genetic level, its real easy to screw up. Too much detail or too much of the wrong details and you crash and burn. Leave too little and you leave the audience gets hyperthermia from how cold it leaves them
My high standard for this is going to be The Wolf's Hour, a book set in World War 2 that mixes James Bond with werewolves. Well, the scenes are very stimulating with at least 4 sex scenes, including one right right after the daring opening. Its been a while, but its as much love making as it is primal need being fulfilled. Also it felt as if the characters were multi faceted, and you were rooting for them once they get it on.
For one that fades to the net scene as things get steamy, I turn to Dragon Age 2's isabella and Fenris Romance, and the once cutscene from Inquisition where male inquisitor romances the iron bull. For two of them (Iron bull and Isabella) its the humor. Regardless if playing male or female, isabella clings to your torso with her legs and arms making out, while the Hawk is disarming her along the way to their bed. For Bull, he's already Naked on the bed waiting for the Inquisitor when three of the characters barge in for business one at a time with expressions of alarm, intrige, and her typical annoyed look respective.
Hawk and Fenris, ties to his past. Part of it is due to his memories are locked away, and having this bit
One of the worst is I'm going to say Stephen King's Salem's lot. While fading to black when things start warming up is both common and acceptable method of having it in a story. However with his, the two scenes to come to mind leave enough fanservice to make you think something is going to be good then cuts to different scene. The first of such being with the lead character and his lover interest going from hiking her skit up and moving her body so he can cup her breast better as they make out in the park, and she asks him to make love to her. We cut to them walking in the park and talking while having an after sex glow. Not only had I have to read that again to make sure I didn't miss anything, I thought "That's it?"
The second and third were with some characters I couldn't even be bothered to remember their names. We spend several pages on the description of a desperate and what she is and is not wearing in bed, and her body before her lover shows up. The male is given little detail other than he is younger and nervous. The second time they are less nervous and the husband catches them, and it leads to an ugly scene that just makes you want to see the husband inevitably killed by the vampires as viciously as possible. The first time the fun bit gets skipped to a different scene at the other end of town, the second what starts off as fun and romantic soon hits a skip scene where it is more than obvious the wife was raped and brutalized.
THe problem here, as with a number of characters in the book, they felt needless and could have been left out with nothing loss. Worse still because of the strong implications of sexual assault in the second part, it felt particularly gratuitous. A topic for another thread for when and when not to add this.
The other direction can also be a problem. TV tropes has a section called Ikea Sex where the love scene felt more like an anatomical description than anything stimulating than putting togeather a cheap coffy table.
If it also seems out of place, or has no build up to it, it can feel shoehorned in.
I think any given sex scene from a Uwi Boll film counts, and since I only saw BloodRayne from Start to finish I will go there. She wakes up from a nightmare, then pushes one of the male leads that didn't have wooden acting against her cell doors, loosens his belt, opens up her vest, and starts rubbing on him. Outside of the exposed breasts its largely tame enough for a Youtube video. It felt out of place as up until this point the two had as much chemistry as room temperature water.
Now this isn't to say there are not anything like this that isn't possible to do. I point to Aliens Genocide. The rich pharmaceutical CEO paying for this expedition drowns his sorrows in expensive booze and the arms of women. And as he romancing one, willing and ready to get going, the other lead interrupts them to have a chat with the CEO. Its a fun kind of 180 turn as you are happy to see him suffer as him have a moment of success.
So how would I write a sex scene?
Frankly I think I would be in the group that would die in a fire, and while going in a blaze of glory might be fun, the market is already full of mediocre love scene. But if I were I would try to be poetic, with enough colorful language to gently walk you through it or make it wild and intense as the scene requires. Using words like caress, kneed, stroke, bath in loving glow for a gentler scene. A moe intence might need fire, primal, feral,a roar of triumph for an orgasm. Heck, might even work for a fight that turns into lovemaking for the second. After all its not a Darthroki wedding unless three people geted hacked apart in a fight, and a broken collar bone on honnymoon is a sign of good luck for Klingons.
For scenes where we skip it, I wouldn't waste the reader/viewer's time.
And to shamelessly plug my work, a link to my book
but others are also likewise wannabe writers in books, comics, or even fanfic. SO lets put our heads together and try to help each other with tips and tricks we did or saw done right, and learn from went so horribly wrong. And I will have pictures since I tend to write alot and people need a visual break. Given the subject matter, they will be safe for work. Also some mild spoilers as I wil have some excamples.
So, Sex; procreation; mating; boinking; Coitis; shagging; hooking up; copulation; fornication; getting biblical; to know him/her; to become better strangers, country matters; interourse; intimacy; love making; to have relations with someone; a sexual congress; and several variations of a word that starts with an F.
While the Asexuals on the forum may be bewildered why the rest of humanity are into it. It feels good. THere are over thirty thousand hypersensitive nerve endings in the happy parts, and several areas on the human body are endroginous zones. We write songs about this, we tell stories of this, we make fine art of it.
Unfortunately when done right you can hear a heavenly chorus sing. When done wrong we understand why the Aces in the room gets squeaked by this. We have all read or watched a love making scene in a book or film and most of us either though: "Oh yes" or "that's it?"
ANd frankly despite something that is programed into most of us on a genetic level, its real easy to screw up. Too much detail or too much of the wrong details and you crash and burn. Leave too little and you leave the audience gets hyperthermia from how cold it leaves them
My high standard for this is going to be The Wolf's Hour, a book set in World War 2 that mixes James Bond with werewolves. Well, the scenes are very stimulating with at least 4 sex scenes, including one right right after the daring opening. Its been a while, but its as much love making as it is primal need being fulfilled. Also it felt as if the characters were multi faceted, and you were rooting for them once they get it on.
For one that fades to the net scene as things get steamy, I turn to Dragon Age 2's isabella and Fenris Romance, and the once cutscene from Inquisition where male inquisitor romances the iron bull. For two of them (Iron bull and Isabella) its the humor. Regardless if playing male or female, isabella clings to your torso with her legs and arms making out, while the Hawk is disarming her along the way to their bed. For Bull, he's already Naked on the bed waiting for the Inquisitor when three of the characters barge in for business one at a time with expressions of alarm, intrige, and her typical annoyed look respective.
Hawk and Fenris, ties to his past. Part of it is due to his memories are locked away, and having this bit
One of the worst is I'm going to say Stephen King's Salem's lot. While fading to black when things start warming up is both common and acceptable method of having it in a story. However with his, the two scenes to come to mind leave enough fanservice to make you think something is going to be good then cuts to different scene. The first of such being with the lead character and his lover interest going from hiking her skit up and moving her body so he can cup her breast better as they make out in the park, and she asks him to make love to her. We cut to them walking in the park and talking while having an after sex glow. Not only had I have to read that again to make sure I didn't miss anything, I thought "That's it?"
The second and third were with some characters I couldn't even be bothered to remember their names. We spend several pages on the description of a desperate and what she is and is not wearing in bed, and her body before her lover shows up. The male is given little detail other than he is younger and nervous. The second time they are less nervous and the husband catches them, and it leads to an ugly scene that just makes you want to see the husband inevitably killed by the vampires as viciously as possible. The first time the fun bit gets skipped to a different scene at the other end of town, the second what starts off as fun and romantic soon hits a skip scene where it is more than obvious the wife was raped and brutalized.
THe problem here, as with a number of characters in the book, they felt needless and could have been left out with nothing loss. Worse still because of the strong implications of sexual assault in the second part, it felt particularly gratuitous. A topic for another thread for when and when not to add this.
The other direction can also be a problem. TV tropes has a section called Ikea Sex where the love scene felt more like an anatomical description than anything stimulating than putting togeather a cheap coffy table.
If it also seems out of place, or has no build up to it, it can feel shoehorned in.
I think any given sex scene from a Uwi Boll film counts, and since I only saw BloodRayne from Start to finish I will go there. She wakes up from a nightmare, then pushes one of the male leads that didn't have wooden acting against her cell doors, loosens his belt, opens up her vest, and starts rubbing on him. Outside of the exposed breasts its largely tame enough for a Youtube video. It felt out of place as up until this point the two had as much chemistry as room temperature water.
Now this isn't to say there are not anything like this that isn't possible to do. I point to Aliens Genocide. The rich pharmaceutical CEO paying for this expedition drowns his sorrows in expensive booze and the arms of women. And as he romancing one, willing and ready to get going, the other lead interrupts them to have a chat with the CEO. Its a fun kind of 180 turn as you are happy to see him suffer as him have a moment of success.
So how would I write a sex scene?
Frankly I think I would be in the group that would die in a fire, and while going in a blaze of glory might be fun, the market is already full of mediocre love scene. But if I were I would try to be poetic, with enough colorful language to gently walk you through it or make it wild and intense as the scene requires. Using words like caress, kneed, stroke, bath in loving glow for a gentler scene. A moe intence might need fire, primal, feral,a roar of triumph for an orgasm. Heck, might even work for a fight that turns into lovemaking for the second. After all its not a Darthroki wedding unless three people geted hacked apart in a fight, and a broken collar bone on honnymoon is a sign of good luck for Klingons.
For scenes where we skip it, I wouldn't waste the reader/viewer's time.
And to shamelessly plug my work, a link to my book