This piece doesn't really seem to fit either the modern political situation or the fictional one.
I mean, "blasters make us all equal" is kind of a silly thing to say in an age of droid armies and orbital turbolaser bombardment, just like "guns make us all equal" is a ridiculous thing to say in an age of tanks and strike bombers and nuclear missiles. "Blasters make us all equal except the guys who can deflect the with their fancy energy swords, and this is the main reason to kill off Jedi" is an even sillier thing to say.
It's all too dry for a pamphlet, too. A tyrant's propaganda machine is supposed to spew slogans. You're giving us... doctrines. It's like the opening speech at a meeting of the Imperial Junior Debate Society.
-- Alex