Poetry anyone?

AndiGravity

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I'm not sure I'm a cynic, exactly, since I do hold out hope there is a virtuous core to the soul that mankind will one day embrace. It's just so far, like Diogenes with a lantern, I keep running into a disappointing lack of proof it's true.

De nada for the advice, and your poem is of course yours to do with as you please. It's your poem and yours alone, and so is the credit for writing it. I only suggested a minor edit or two.
 

mshcherbatskaya

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Monument Valley

Eve and Medusa are roadtripping through the desert southwest
in a teal-green Thunderbird convertible.
Medusa brought it home for Valentine's Day
a surprise for Eve
to say nothing of the men
at the dealership.
Saw it in the window
walked in and shook off her
green silk head-wrap.

Eve knows in her gut the car is stolen.
Doesn't care.

The road snakes through monuments of
red rock framed in celluloid
heat that shimmers at
24 frames a second.
Eve sick of suburban gardens
Medusa at home in a landscape of stone.

Medusa's hair does not blow and tangle but
suns itself upon her shoulders
reflects in the mirror of Eve's sunglasses.
Eve strokes Medusa's neck
coils her fingers in curls that coil back
thinks back to her first love
and smiles.
 

Ciarog

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As a rule of thumb I refrain from writing about anything that I can't put into graph form, so I'll instead regurgitate a poem from one of my favourite poets, writing a eulogy for another one of my favourite poets.

In Memory of W.B. Yeats

I

He disappeared in the dead of winter:
The brooks were frozen, the airports almost deserted,
The snow disfigured the public statues;
The mercury sank in the mouth of the dying day.
What instruments we have agree
The day of his death was a dark cold day.

Far from his illness
The wolves ran on through the evergreen forests,
The peasant river was untempted by the fashionable quays;
By mourning tongues
The death of the poet was kept from his poems.

But for him it was his last afternoon as himself,
An afternoon of nurses and rumours;
The provinces of his body revolted,
The squares of his mind were empty,
Silence invaded the suburbs,
The current of his feeling failed; he became his admirers.

Now he is scattered among a hundred cities
And wholly given over to unfamiliar affections,
To find his happiness in another kind of wood
And be punished under a foreign code of conscience.
The words of a dead man
Are modified in the guts of the living.

But in the importance and noise of to-morrow
When the brokers are roaring like beasts on the floor of the Bourse,
And the poor have the sufferings to which they are fairly accustomed,
And each in the cell of himself is almost convinced of his freedom,
A few thousand will think of this day
As one thinks of a day when one did something slightly unusual.
What instruments we have agree
The day of his death was a dark cold day.


II

You were silly like us; your gift survived it all:
The parish of rich women, physical decay,
Yourself. Mad Ireland hurt you into poetry.
Now Ireland has her madness and her weather still,
For poetry makes nothing happen: it survives
In the valley of its making where executives
Would never want to tamper, flows on south
From ranches of isolation and the busy griefs,
Raw towns that we believe and die in; it survives,
A way of happening, a mouth.


III

Earth, receive an honoured guest:
William Yeats is laid to rest.
Let the Irish vessel lie
Emptied of its poetry.

[Auden later deleted the next three stanzas.]

Time that is intolerant
Of the brave and the innocent,
And indifferent in a week
To a beautiful physique,

Worships language and forgives
Everyone by whom it lives;
Pardons cowardice, conceit,
Lays its honours at their feet.

Time that with this strange excuse
Pardoned Kipling and his views,
And will pardon Paul Claudel,
Pardons him for writing well.

In the nightmare of the dark
All the dogs of Europe bark,
And the living nations wait,
Each sequestered in its hate;

Intellectual disgrace
Stares from every human face,
And the seas of pity lie
Locked and frozen in each eye.

Follow, poet, follow right
To the bottom of the night,
With your unconstraining voice
Still persuade us to rejoice.

With the farming of a verse
Make a vineyard of the curse,
Sing of human unsuccess
In a rapture of distress.

In the deserts of the heart
Let the healing fountains start,
In the prison of his days
Teach the free man how to praise.

WH Auden
 

hobartuk

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i have never taken my own poetry too seriously, more of a novelist/description person

Opaque Little Stairs

Opaque little stairs that rise and rise
With no changing or thickening in size
And yes they raise forever
They bloom from eternal never
Be careful not to slip
So clumsy as a trip
To avoid falling
Into the wonderful endless space surrounding

Opaque little stairs rise and rise
Elevating and booming to the skies
And no we can’t be together
One’s trip’s a lonely forever
Until we grow and burst through the lights
Taking in the enormous and stretching sights
To forever fly
And view the wonderful endless space surrounding

Opaque little stairs fall and dissolve
Falling and sinking
Into the endless ocean of darkness
Broken into reflective shards of resolve
We scream and shout
When we harness the ability to live without
Opaque little stairs
 

babyblueeyes

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Finish Line
by lizzi

theres so much wrong
theres so much pain
i dont know how to explain
that God is real
jst wait and see
ill prove you wrong
dont you believe
when the time comes
im going home
just look into it
i dont want to go alone
he put us here
to spread his word
but look around
i havnt heard
theres a man i call my lord
he is AWESOME
his love is STRONG
for me and for you
just listen to this song
praise him,
love him and
youll go home
after death its
where you belong
his word is the bible
havent you seen
life is to good to waste
so go my brothers
and my sisters
dont hesitate
spread the word
like the flu
make it contagouse
its already new
dont cry and
dont waste time
for our time on earth
is almost at its
FINISH LINE!!!!
hey if you all dont mind i would like it if you posted me a comment telling me if this is good or not and wut i can do to fix it. my youth pastor at my old church asked me to write something cuz we were speaking about the rapture in youth group.
 

babyblueeyes

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Alotak said:
this is a poem i wrote in my spare time thinking of the girl who i don't have the balls to talk to.

I can tear you in two,
I can cause you to cry,
I set delusions upon you,
I can cause you to lie,
I can make you blind,
I can cause you to sigh,
I can mess with your mind,
I can cause you to die,
And yet you can?t fully understand
Why i constantly demand,
To be put above,
All i am,
is Love.


Pliz tell me what ya think, any advice or ideas for other poems, (if you think i'm good enough).

WOW!!!!!! THIS IS REALLY GOOD!!! i think u should keep writing and i also think that this is good enough to get published. keep up th egood work!!!! read mine.
 

Alotak

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Thanks,
your poem is realy good, but i'm afriad i disagree with angle,
I find it hard to believe in a being which could put me through so much pain.
sorry.
 

Alotak

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These are Free Verse Poems, so don't look for coherency.
Again these are about a girl at my school who i like.

You know he likes her
but you don't encorage,
I will encorage him
if you encorage her,
In helping them,
We may become closer.

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As i look into your Eyes,
I see the light only i can see,
It dulls all others, removing their lies,
And you still don't see me.

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Now you see him, i am but another,
He knows how i feel, ingnores his creed,
He once was my brother,
I have begun to wonder if he'll change,
When i cause him to bleed,
Then mabye he wil re-arange,
And your may see me, the other.
 

Alotak

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AndiGravity said:
I'm not sure I'm a cynic, exactly, since I do hold out hope there is a virtuous core to the soul that mankind will one day embrace. It's just so far, like Diogenes with a lantern, I keep running into a disappointing lack of proof it's true.
Your a cynic, because deep down, you know, you search in vain.
 

RazielDethAngel

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Bindings

The time of sorrow comes to rise
Whilst staring at these dreary skies

Their horrid lies may just sway
Many from their holy way

I know the uncorrupted truth
This I say in absolute

Until the final breath you breathe
You will never know true glee

This world of suffering; pain(<- I don't like that line)
Nothing you can ever gain

Being truly free you find
There are no more ties that bind
~~~

I have just about ten Poems and Little Blurbs all over my blog. I really like this one so I just copy pasted it. So tell me what you think of it.
 

Lord_Ascendant

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This is something I wrote a while back

I AM THE ROMANCER
the passion that consumes the flesh

I AM THE DESTROYER
the ill will that snuffs the final candle

I AM THE ILLUMINATOR
the bright light that banishes all shadows

I AM THE FLAMES!
I am the guide to the lost
I am the destroyer of Ancient Cities
I am the light
I am the blight upon the darkness

FEAR ME
For I am more hungry than the most vile of Demons

WHO WISHES TO CHALLENGE ME?
 

The Potato Lord

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Dang I had just finished writing a booklet of opoetry in english and i don't have it on me, luckily I remembered one of the best ones I did which was a Haiku.

Cake

The Cake is a lie
Actually that is not true,
There is cake for you!
 

electric discordian

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New Vistas

My heart breaks
frustration is my
only love

It lurks in boxes
breaking apart
the sanity of the
world

destroys that
which seeks
to work

divides conquers
tears apart
my heart

life and agony
entwined
breathless horror

until the day
I am renewed
my life saved

Im back
to
Xp

Not the best but written at three o clock with heart burn!
 

TheKnifeJuggler

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Haiku, 5,7,5.

Lets see what I can make up...

I once was a ghost.
Staying out of the bright lights,
I moved things on stage.

Fury awakened,
I yelled at my close friends.
They stopped the questions.
 

Larenxis

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I was in a team poetry slam once.
We came in last.
It was his fault, they said.
They were wrong.
 

BlazeTheVampire

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electric discordian said:
New Vistas

My heart breaks
frustration is my
only love

It lurks in boxes
breaking apart
the sanity of the
world

destroys that
which seeks
to work

divides conquers
tears apart
my heart

life and agony
entwined
breathless horror

until the day
I am renewed
my life saved

Im back
to
Xp

Not the best but written at three o clock with heart burn!
Oh the glorious day when my dad reformatted my hard drive back to XP after dealing with Vista! I got my laptop when Dell was only offering Vista, unfortunately. He got XP on his new computer and used those discs to rescue me.
 

AndiGravity

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Alotak said:
AndiGravity said:
I'm not sure I'm a cynic, exactly, since I do hold out hope there is a virtuous core to the soul that mankind will one day embrace. It's just so far, like Diogenes with a lantern, I keep running into a disappointing lack of proof it's true.
Your a cynic, because deep down, you know, you search in vain.
Oh well...
 

Kikosemmek

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Lovemother

I lay here on this bed. It is yet still cold.
You make it warm for me, with motions so mild and so bold.
What I see is a red-and-black angelic silhouette,
Here to bring me back into her all-caressing, all-loving fold.

You consume me entirely. I'm just a flake on your tongue.
Mother, putting me back to sleep- her valiant care is a storm.
Our hearts beat together, now, and I am drawn into your eyes.
I begin to see your true beauty. The flashing lights make me cum.

I awake and cry in a foreign bed, with Mother gone.
Everything around me is as it was, and no one's here to make it warm.
You're not my Mother, and my own knows not her son.
I was aborted and exposed. I was all too rough to be born.

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Welcome Home

He went out to make his money, and win the bread.
He's a good man, with wife and children to be fed.
Out at work, he stumbles, falls, and breaks his leg.
He couldn't stop; limped on, and returned, victorious, with a peg.

The cool breeze makes a cast of his face
As he climbs up the mountain, months after embrace.
He last kissed him where steel birds take flight,
And went away to see what beauty he left after the fight.

Her skin breaks open with some wilder crisp;
This woman's neck is thoroughly savored. He foams.
He sucks the blood, enjoying the taste, and whisps,
Knowing what neck he'll return to when he's lastly back home.

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Where True Valor Lies

His shield glimmers in the morning breeze.
A carrion stands on his heels.
As the sun shone with soft strokes of light,
A chariot shattered the steel.

His stand seemed to phase
Like a leaf in the wind of a dream.
Now his gaze attention recieves;
Now his efforts of valor for honor are deemed.

Fight, here today!
Face a lion in his stare.
Fight, on this day!
Like an eagle;
Like a wolf near his share.

As the light bends above his brows,
A shadow stands on his heels.
And his arm hurt from much overuse;
The Spartan collapsed on his knees.

And the ground hue shifts
Like a drop in the aura of gleam.
Now his heart a long rest recieves;
Now his scars of battle medallions are deemed.

Fought, here today!
Many lions in his stare.
Fought, on this day!
Like an eagle;
Like a wolf near his share...