It's fairly good. Well written, if that's what you're asking for. However, I can't even comment on the concept or whatever idea you're trying to write considering how vague the opening is. Apparently, one of those destiny-babies was born today. That's all I got really. You can't even truly figure that the baby being born will be our main character. You see how little you gave us to work with?
It's important to work out the plot before putting anything finite down. People in the education system would tell you that you should get your ideas out and just start writing. Well, a creative writing story is different than an essay. What you need to do is to start writing, but whatever you're writing will not be your story. Write you're entire concept of the story you want to convey out in the plainest terms. When you're finished, write it again adding specified details. Plan out plot points and do entire character studies for your characters. It all can't just be from your head.
From what I can tell, you plan to get this all out in one go. Write out one page or one chapter at a time and build on that. I figure that simply because I used to do the same thing when I was a freshman in high school. Well, that's really what you can't do. You can't just start writing your story and try to sound as fancy and well-written as possible. That comes after you get your story out on paper. Seriously, multiple rewrites are your friend, and I don't mean making small changes. I mean, blank paper in front of you and completely rewrite your story. I know it doesn't sound fun, but that's the way you need to do it in creative writing. And, this subject is a creative writing matter, not composition. Those are two different classes. Perhaps if you tell us the actual story you wish to write, I could help you better than with just this vague opening.