Webcomics? ALL RIGHT!

[PlasticPorter]

I've decided to throw my "skills of an artist" into the bloodstained boxing ring that is the collection of webcomics across the web and see how my drawing/making-you-laugh abilities measure up. I don't plan on getting famous or even get a decent amount of attention to my comic its really just a way to keep in practice with photoshop and illustrator. But I just finished this one and I'd like to see what you wonderful people here at the Escapist think

The strip doesn't have a name yet either so could I get some suggestions?

EDIT: I changed the img size i hope you can all see it now

 

[TMAN10112]

you might need to reduce the size of the comic, I can only see left side of it. Although that might just be my computer.

 

[j1-2themax]

It's not the computer; I cannot see the right side, either.

 

[joystickjunki3]

Not bad. I'd go for a little more of an obvious humor, though.

EDIT: I can see the whole comic.

 

[Spartan Bannana]

That was kinda funny

 

[fluffylandmine]

I can only see the left half.

Hey, why not add a poll seeing how many can see the whole thing or who can only see the left half![/joking]

 

[superbleeder12]

I see the joke, I understand the joke, but I didn't really laugh at the joke

 

[Souplex]

The entire right side is cut off.

 

[Aardvark]

It's funny, just not rofflecoaster mclollerskates funny. Still, there's worse out there, you stretched the joke well and once you build up a fan base, you'll be able to cash in with a book detailing how your artistic style evolved over the years.

 

[sheic99]

you might need to reduce the size of the comic, I can only see left side of it. Although that might just be my computer.

try increasing your resolution. I can see it fine.

 

[PlasticPorter]

It's funny, just not rofflecoaster mclollerskates funny. Still, there's worse out there, you stretched the joke well and once you build up a fan base, you'll be able to cash in with a book detailing how your artistic style evolved over the years.

Hah
not really my intention, Im attending college to become an animator and with all my inclass animation I dont really have time to do any big home projects so this is just me practicing my comedic timing and all that, thanks for the feedback though

 

[Anarchemitis]

Who's, not Whose. -Confirm spelling
-The boxes need to have some kind of alignment. Just having them as an interior border to negate negative space works as long as they're not placed haphazardly, causing visual distraction.
-Who the deuce is that kid? Unless this is a Pilot episode where the real first comic will introduce them.
Other than that, great.
You've got a bit more potential than I do since you can actually draw worth a dint. All I can do is doodle, and I can't even do people. That's why I stick with x434343 for my comic. Garry's mod is always unoriginal.

 

[PlasticPorter]

Who's, not Whose. -Confirm spelling
-The boxes need to have some kind of alignment. Just having them as an interior border to negate negative space works as long as they're not placed haphazardly, causing visual distraction.
-Who the deuce is that kid? Unless this is a Pilot episode where the real first comic will introduce them.
Other than that, great.
You've got a bit more potential than I do since you can actually draw worth a dint. All I can do is doodle, and I can't even do people. That's why I stick with x434343 for my comic. Garry's mod is always unoriginal.

yeah this is the pilot lol
the little ginger ***** is me though
this whole situation happened to me earlier this week in my *gag* public speaking class

 

[Blind0bserver]

you might need to reduce the size of the comic, I can only see left side of it. Although that might just be my computer.

It's not the computer; I cannot see the right side, either.

The entire right side is cut off.

To answer all of your questions, it's because your using Internet Explorer. I know that's the problem because I brought this page up in IE on a computer with a resolution of 1400 by 900 and the text in the last panel was cut off. Switch to Firefox, people.

Anyway, back on topic. I got the joke and it was funny, but the problem is that not enough people might get it. Appealing to a wider audience wouldn't be a bad idea. Other than that I'd say it isn't bad, especially for a first attempt.

 

[rottenbutter]

Well, I chuckled. It was Okay.

 

[TMAN10112]

I just looked at the comic using safari, it could use some work, but it has potential.

 

[PlasticPorter]

I just looked at the comic using safari, it could use some work, but it has potential.

have any suggestions for a name?

 

[Hunde Des Krieg]

I don't like the drawing in the first panel, but the others are okay.

 

[Berethond]

It's alright, I've seen a lot of stuff that's less funny.
And for people who can't see it, quote him and copy & paste the img URL in your address bar.

 

[TMAN10112]

I just looked at the comic using safari, it could use some work, but it has potential.

have any suggestions for a name?

I would need to know more about where the comic is going to suggest a good name, but "Game Plan" might work if it is about general game humor.