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@Steeple: No see, the point of that chocolate was that the chocolate was me writing poems, I enjoy writing poems the way I do it, and even if I could do it properly with images and all, I just don't want to, it's not fun and really I don't care that much
So to answer your question, I just enjoy writing, i'd like others to see my feelings I suppose but I have no intention of being a professional poet so I just write them the way I like to :p
 
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@mParadox: Oh, Chocolate wasn't really meant to be good, it was just to show @Steeple: the problems with his criticism, in a way that establishes his criticisms, it's to one-up him basically ;)
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@Steeple: No see, the point of that chocolate was that the chocolate was me writing poems, I enjoy writing poems the way I do it, and even if I could do it properly with images and all, I just don't want to, it's not fun and really I don't care that much
So to answer your question, I just enjoy writing, i'd like others to see my feelings I suppose but I have no intention of being a professional poet so I just write them the way I like to :p
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I'd never say to you that you should write in any way that you wont consider fun! it's just that you asked our opinion on that poem, and pushed quite a bit, so I gave you my thoughts on what I read...
 
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@steeple: Aight, I won't force you to read any more if ya don't want to, thanks for he constructive criticism but, as was said I just don't think I can >.<

@mParadox: =D It is? *dances around in happiness*
 
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@steeple: Aight, I won't force you to read any more if ya don't want to, thanks for he constructive criticism but, as was said I just don't think I can >.<
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my pleasure...
also, since para aroused my curiosity, I read the last one... it was better, but again just felt a bit blunt...
 
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Now, this poem throws out any notion of structure but you may like it anyway:
<spoiler=Monster>Previously, when I and few had gathered,
You were a subject of much conversation,
They said you are a beast, reptilian in nature,
A humourless robot who sways as she walks
Your eyes, a gaze, your face, a blank stare
You speak with a shout that pierces the heavens
Clearly, you are one to avoid

Yet now, here you are, you are no monster
And is that a smile I see upon your face?
How could you be interpreted as such a crone,
After all, you are merely a woman
Dare I say, a nice woman?

But, in the next gathering, when you are mentioned,
I shall discard these thoughts and continue,
To refer to you as I have been, that is,
An awful, vile, ugly, despicable witch
Nothing shall change and nothing shall upset me
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I know, I said "I and few", move along now
 
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@retyopy: Uch, Chocolate doubled up as me not liking chocolate, I have a packet of minstrels with me and I just think they're awful >.<
 
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@steeple: Ehm, monster actually has images in it if ya want, but I still don't think you'd like it :p
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actually, this one was a lot better...
unfortunately, it's context isnt... you bastard...
 
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@thundero: there's a difference between making fun of and saying bad stuff at, but that's not why we are here today!
 
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